2008哈爾濱市中考
朋友，還記得那些陪伴你左右的同桌(deskmate)嗎？他們樂觀向上；他們自強(qiáng)不息；他們誠實(shí)可信；他們勤奮好學(xué)……你的生活因他們而精彩！請(qǐng)通過一件事的記述，讓我們認(rèn)識(shí)一下你的一位勤奮好學(xué)的(hard-working） 同桌吧！
要求：
1.請(qǐng)根據(jù)所提供的信息材料和話題（不要逐句翻譯），寫出結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)、內(nèi)容完整、語言豐富優(yōu)美、語法準(zhǔn)確、可讀性強(qiáng)的短文。
2.至少80詞。
3.不得使用真實(shí)姓名、地名和學(xué)校名。
4.題目自擬。
寫作指導(dǎo)
這是一篇記敘與描寫相結(jié)合的文章。根據(jù)所提供的材料，首先應(yīng)介紹一個(gè)人物，包括描寫他/她的外貌和性格特征等；然后通過記敘一件事來展現(xiàn)這個(gè)人。同學(xué)們需要注意的是：在描述人物時(shí)通常用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，而記述一件事應(yīng)該用一般過去時(shí)。
描寫人物是大家比較熟悉的話題，但要寫好并不容易。首先大家應(yīng)避免寫成流水帳，或用千篇一律的套話空話使文章顯得索然無味。在記述一件事情時(shí)，應(yīng)該選擇能夠給讀者留下深刻印象的事例，或能夠突出所描述人物性格特點(diǎn)的典型事例。記述時(shí)要注意語言表達(dá)的清楚準(zhǔn)確。
最后的結(jié)尾要扣題。同學(xué)們可以對(duì)所描述的人物進(jìn)行簡單的評(píng)價(jià)，詞匯量大的同學(xué)可以用排比句來抒情，給文章添彩。適當(dāng)運(yùn)用從句和連詞將使文章更加流暢連貫。
下面的詞匯和句型可以給大家在寫作時(shí)提供一些幫助：
optimistic, honest, helpful, colorful, friendly, clever, help somebody with something, get along well with, learn from, help each other.
范文1：一檔文
My Deskmate
During these three years, I can't go through without her help. She is my deskmate - Mary. She is a really kind girl, who never fails to make others happy. We are fascinated with her because she often helps us with our lessons. At first, I'm not very glad of sitting beside her because she is so excellent. And that will bring me too much pressure. However, one thing changed my opinion and we became close friends.
That was a cold winter morning, I got a bad cold. Nobody noticed that and I felt very sad. When my deskmate knew that, she ran to the school clinic and bought some medicine for me. Then she gave me some fruit and poured hot water for me. Looking at her busy doing these things, I was moved entirely. Thanks to her help, I spent the terrible day happily.
That is my deskmate. She gave me help and warmth. I feel lucky that I have such a good deskmate. She is the sunshine in my world!
點(diǎn)評(píng)：
這是一篇寫得非常成功的文章。它用生動(dòng)的語言描述了同桌的特點(diǎn)，恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用了復(fù)合句和連詞使文章更加靈活，流暢。文章通過對(duì)同桌在作者生病時(shí)伸出友愛之手這件事的描述，使文章的主人公形象更加具體，逼真。
范文2：二檔文
My Deskmate
Mike was my deskmate. He was tall and thin. He was clever and hard-working. And he was a top student in my class. I think he influenced me a lot.
When I was in Grade One, I was not interested in Chinese. I thought it was boring. I was often absent-minded in Chinese class. When Mike found this, he often reminded me that I should listen to the teacher carefully. After class, he often helped me with my Chinese. He told me the importance of learning Chinese. He also taught me some good ways of learning Chinese. Because of Mike's help, I became more and more interested in Chinese. I got an A in the final exam. I really couldn't believe that! What great progress I made!
Mike is not only my deskmate, but also my best friend. Without him, my life won't be so colorful!
點(diǎn)評(píng)：
從整體上看，這篇文章寫得也不錯(cuò)。作者形象地描述了同桌的外貌與性格特征，對(duì)一件事情的記述也比較清楚。但有美中不足之處：1. 第一自然段的時(shí)態(tài)不正確，描述客觀事實(shí)應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。2. 在記述一件事情時(shí)， “often”這個(gè)詞出現(xiàn)的次數(shù)太多，可換成其他頻度副詞以避免重復(fù)。3. 在適當(dāng)?shù)牡胤饺绻芗右恍┻B詞會(huì)使文章顯得更加流暢。
主題詞匯和有用句型
主題詞匯：
外貌：good-looking 長得好看的,pretty 漂亮的, beautiful 美麗的, lovely 可愛的,medium height 中等身高, medium build 中等身材,overweight 超重的,slim 苗條的
性格/品質(zhì)：brave 勇敢的, confident 有信心的, honest 誠實(shí)的,patient 有耐心的, easy-going 隨和的, outgoing 外向的,energetic 精力充沛的, forgetful 健忘的, generous 寬宏大量的, talented 有才能的, hard-working 勤勞的, helpful 樂于助人的
有用句型：
Mr Green is a reporter 格林先生是一名記者
He's very kind/ polite 他很和藹/有禮貌……
I like/enjoy doing 我喜歡做……
My hobby is... 我的愛好是……
I'm good at... 我擅長……
I'm interested in...
我對(duì)……感興趣
My favorite subject is...
我最喜愛的學(xué)科是……
模擬試題
初三生活將結(jié)束，在三年的初中生活當(dāng)中，你遇到過很多老師，請(qǐng)根據(jù)你的經(jīng)歷，以My favorite teacher為題，寫你最喜歡的一位老師。
要求：1. 寫出你最喜歡這位老師的原因，條理清楚。
2. 詞數(shù)在80詞左右。
3. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名校名。
參考范文
My favorite teacher
Everyone has his or her favorite teacher, so do I . My favorite teacher is Miss Wang, our English teacher.
Miss Wang is beautiful. She has big eyes and curly hair. She wears glasses. Most of all, I like her because she is very kind and patient to us. Three years ago, when I started at my school, I found English very difficult. At first, Miss Wang seemed very strict. But she asked students with difficulties to her office where she helped them face to face. Little by little, I began to see she is very kind and patient. She explains everthing to us until we understand it. She never gives up on students like me who have trouble with English. She tells us not to worry and never gives up. She inspired me and makes me do my best to study English. I have made great progress over the last three years.
Time flies! I'm going to graduate soon and I really want to say: “Thank you, my beloved teacher!”
